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It looks mostly fine to me, but I would get Vorknkx's opinion as well. The only thing that bothers me is "video game graphic". I would remove the word "graphic", it is redundant and also doesn't look right in the statement.
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It looks mostly fine to me, but I would get Vorknkx's opinion as well. The only thing that bothers me is "video game graphic". I would remove the word "graphic", it is redundant and also doesn't look right in the statement. Also "it is believed" almost implies insecurity, it might not be the best term to use.

Latest revision as of 20:56, 19 April 2019

It looks mostly fine to me, but I would get Vorknkx's opinion as well. The only thing that bothers me is "video game graphic". I would remove the word "graphic", it is redundant and also doesn't look right in the statement. Also "it is believed" almost implies insecurity, it might not be the best term to use.

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